[keithblan]

I wouldn't have done much different except to lighten her tan and her hair. Also add a bit of vibrance and redness to the hair. Perhaps a similar effect could have been achieved with a slight increase in exposure.

See what you think.

   

BTW. Do you have a diffuser on your flashgun? I've found the Stofen diffuser on my Canon speedlight helps a lot in these bounced flash situations.